MagicPigPerson wrote:

pianorecorder wrote:

Username: @pianorecorder
Link to previous work(a short story or some art): https://scratch-mit-edu.ezproxy.canberra.edu.au/projects/129328926/ and the sequel: https://scratch-mit-edu.ezproxy.canberra.edu.au/projects/170443162/
How active will you be(1-10): 6 to 8
Following the thread: Yes, I just did
Anything else you want to tell us: Not very good at art

Please make sure the links lead to the actual projects and not random pages, thanks!

FollowCherryBlossom wrote:

Character Review(for us to review your character):
NOTE: If you are still working on your character, then it is fine to leave some of the fields blank. However, the more information we have about your character, the better quality review we can give.
Username: followcherryblossom
Character name: Emerald
Looks: https://scratch-mit-edu.ezproxy.canberra.edu.au/projects/166456091/#player
Powers(if any): no
Talents: climbing trees and singing
Words to describe your character: https://scratch-mit-edu.ezproxy.canberra.edu.au/projects/166456091/#player
Backstory: none
Flaws they have: https://scratch-mit-edu.ezproxy.canberra.edu.au/projects/166456091/#player
When you want it done by: asap
Any specific staff member: no
Anything else you want to tell us: Emerald is in the link

Drunken_Sailor wrote:

FollowCherryBlossom wrote:

Character Review(for us to review your character):
NOTE: If you are still working on your character, then it is fine to leave some of the fields blank. However, the more information we have about your character, the better quality review we can give.
Username: followcherryblossom
Character name: Emerald
Looks: https://scratch-mit-edu.ezproxy.canberra.edu.au/projects/166456091/#player
Powers(if any): no
Talents: climbing trees and singing
Words to describe your character: https://scratch-mit-edu.ezproxy.canberra.edu.au/projects/166456091/#player
Backstory: none
Flaws they have: https://scratch-mit-edu.ezproxy.canberra.edu.au/projects/166456091/#player
When you want it done by: asap
Any specific staff member: no
Anything else you want to tell us: Emerald is in the link

Taken

Name(How unique is this name? Does it fit with the time period and the personality of the character?): It's a great name! It's really unique, and it fits with her bright and shiny personality.

Personality(Is this character a Mary/Gary Sue? Do they have a good balance of both strengths and flaws? Is the character too bland? Is it too cliché?): Nice personality, however your character doesn't seem to demonstrate any flaws

Looks(Is the character too flawless? Do they look realistic? Do they look recognizable as this character?): Your character's looks seem to be very bland and common. For example, I could easily confuse Emerald and Imogen.

Powers(if any)(Do they have some downside to their powers? Are the powers too powerful? Do they make the character's life too easy?): N/A

Other Comments(Tell them anything else you want to tell them. Don't forget to have both positive and negative comments. Don't be too hard, but don't be too nice. They are asking for criticism.): It's a great starting point, but it needs a lot of expanding on ideas to make it a useful character for a Role-Play, book or the like.

Drunken_Sailor wrote:

Character Review for Emerald:

Name(How unique is this name? Does it fit with the time period and the personality of the character?): It's a great name! It's really unique, and it fits with her bright and shiny personality.

Personality(Is this character a Mary/Gary Sue? Do they have a good balance of both strengths and flaws? Is the character too bland? Is it too cliché?): Nice personality, however your character doesn't seem to demonstrate any flaws

Looks(Is the character too flawless? Do they look realistic? Do they look recognizable as this character?): Your character's looks seem to be very bland and common. For example, I could easily confuse Emerald and Imogen.

Powers(if any)(Do they have some downside to their powers? Are the powers too powerful? Do they make the character's life too easy?): N/A

Other Comments(Tell them anything else you want to tell them. Don't forget to have both positive and negative comments. Don't be too hard, but don't be too nice. They are asking for criticism.): It's a great starting point, but it needs a lot of expanding on ideas to make it a useful character for a Role-Play, book or the like.

FollowCherryBlossom wrote:

Drunken_Sailor wrote:

Character Review for Emerald:

Name(How unique is this name? Does it fit with the time period and the personality of the character?): It's a great name! It's really unique, and it fits with her bright and shiny personality.

Personality(Is this character a Mary/Gary Sue? Do they have a good balance of both strengths and flaws? Is the character too bland? Is it too cliché?): Nice personality, however your character doesn't seem to demonstrate any flaws

Looks(Is the character too flawless? Do they look realistic? Do they look recognizable as this character?): Your character's looks seem to be very bland and common. For example, I could easily confuse Emerald and Imogen.

Powers(if any)(Do they have some downside to their powers? Are the powers too powerful? Do they make the character's life too easy?): N/A

Other Comments(Tell them anything else you want to tell them. Don't forget to have both positive and negative comments. Don't be too hard, but don't be too nice. They are asking for criticism.): It's a great starting point, but it needs a lot of expanding on ideas to make it a useful character for a Role-Play, book or the like.

Thanks for feed back this is very helpful, I may add like a second colour in her hair or something like that.

FollowCherryBlossom wrote:

Character Review(for us to review your character):
NOTE: If you are still working on your character, then it is fine to leave some of the fields blank. However, the more information we have about your character, the better quality review we can give.
Username: FollowCherryBlossom
Character name: Fredilina (It's pronounced Freddie-Lee-na)
Looks: https://scratch-mit-edu.ezproxy.canberra.edu.au/projects/166456091/ It Fredilina in there
Powers: none
Talents: https://scratch-mit-edu.ezproxy.canberra.edu.au/projects/166456091/
Words to describe your character: https://scratch-mit-edu.ezproxy.canberra.edu.au/projects/166456091/
Flaws they have: https://scratch-mit-edu.ezproxy.canberra.edu.au/projects/166456091/
When you want it done by: asap
Any specific staff member: @Drunken_sailor
Anything else you want to tell us: It is Fredilina in the project

Drunken_Sailor wrote:

FollowCherryBlossom wrote:

Character Review(for us to review your character):
NOTE: If you are still working on your character, then it is fine to leave some of the fields blank. However, the more information we have about your character, the better quality review we can give.
Username: FollowCherryBlossom
Character name: Fredilina (It's pronounced Freddie-Lee-na)
Looks: https://scratch-mit-edu.ezproxy.canberra.edu.au/projects/166456091/ It Fredilina in there
Powers: none
Talents: https://scratch-mit-edu.ezproxy.canberra.edu.au/projects/166456091/
Words to describe your character: https://scratch-mit-edu.ezproxy.canberra.edu.au/projects/166456091/
Flaws they have: https://scratch-mit-edu.ezproxy.canberra.edu.au/projects/166456091/
When you want it done by: asap
Any specific staff member: @Drunken_sailor
Anything else you want to tell us: It is Fredilina in the project

Ok, taken

FollowCherryBlossom wrote:

Character Review(for us to review your character):
NOTE: If you are still working on your character, then it is fine to leave some of the fields blank. However, the more information we have about your character, the better quality review we can give.
Username: FollowCherryBlossom
Character name: Rosie
Looks: https://scratch-mit-edu.ezproxy.canberra.edu.au/projects/166456091/ It's Rosie in there
Powers: none
Talents: https://scratch-mit-edu.ezproxy.canberra.edu.au/projects/166456091/
Words to describe your character: https://scratch-mit-edu.ezproxy.canberra.edu.au/projects/166456091/
Flaws they have: https://scratch-mit-edu.ezproxy.canberra.edu.au/projects/166456091/
When you want it done by: asap
Any specific staff member: @Drunken_sailor
Anything else you want to tell us: It is Rosie in the project

Drunken_Sailor wrote:

FollowCherryBlossom wrote:

Character Review(for us to review your character):
NOTE: If you are still working on your character, then it is fine to leave some of the fields blank. However, the more information we have about your character, the better quality review we can give.
Username: FollowCherryBlossom
Character name: Rosie
Looks: https://scratch-mit-edu.ezproxy.canberra.edu.au/projects/166456091/ It's Rosie in there
Powers: none
Talents: https://scratch-mit-edu.ezproxy.canberra.edu.au/projects/166456091/
Words to describe your character: https://scratch-mit-edu.ezproxy.canberra.edu.au/projects/166456091/
Flaws they have: https://scratch-mit-edu.ezproxy.canberra.edu.au/projects/166456091/
When you want it done by: asap
Any specific staff member: @Drunken_sailor
Anything else you want to tell us: It is Rosie in the project

Taken too.

Name(How unique is this name? Does it fit with the time period and the personality of the character?): Fredilina is a great name! It really shows her emotions and personality; a bouncy, happy person.

Personality(Is this character a Mary/Gary Sue? Do they have a good balance of both strengths and flaws? Is the character too bland? Is it too cliché?): The character's personality is great! There's an even match of strengths to weaknesses, and everything correlates well.

Looks(Is the character too flawless? Do they look realistic? Do they look recognizable as this character?): She looks great! Much more recognisable than Emerald; she has her own personal touch.

Powers(if any)(Do they have some downside to their powers? Are the powers too powerful? Do they make the character's life too easy?): N/A

Other Comments(Tell them anything else you want to tell them. Don't forget to have both positive and negative comments. Don't be too hard, but don't be too nice. They are asking for criticism.): Great character in general! I especially like her background, and how it may influence her use in a story and influence her personality.

Name(How unique is this name? Does it fit with the time period and the personality of the character?): Well, Rosie fits with her personality; rosy! Great name; linked with personality and character.

Personality(Is this character a Mary/Gary Sue? Do they have a good balance of both strengths and flaws? Is the character too bland? Is it too cliché?): I do think that the “cheerful and bubbly” personality is getting a little too common and cliché with your characters. I also think that any character needs a better weakness that being bad at art; for example: something that will be useful in any situation, such as speed. However, I love the way that you have brought relationships into your characters, especially family and crush.

Looks(Is the character too flawless? Do they look realistic? Do they look recognizable as this character?): Rosie is very original, however her hair is very similar to lots of other characters (almost identical to one), and it needs a bit of uniqueness.

Powers(if any)(Do they have some downside to their powers? Are the powers too powerful? Do they make the character's life too easy?): N/A

Other Comments(Tell them anything else you want to tell them. Don't forget to have both positive and negative comments. Don't be too hard, but don't be too nice. They are asking for criticism.): You have developed some great character ideas here, but I feel that you need more creativity and uniqueness with each specific character. Each character seems to have similar personalities; none of them have quite their own personal touch or creativity. I think all you need to make them a huge success is a little creativity and uniqueness in each one of them.

FollowCherryBlossom wrote:

I'll just right one for Olivia

Name(How unique is this name? Does it fit with the time period and the personality of the character?): It's a modern name, fits with her personality.

Personality(Is this character a Mary/Gary Sue? Do they have a good balance of both strengths and flaws? Is the character too bland? Is it too cliché?): A well-woven personality, especially with the link to Fredilina with the circus. I also like the fact that their weaknesses are much more prominent and important than before.

Looks(Is the character too flawless? Do they look realistic? Do they look recognizable as this character?): The looks are still not very original, as Olivia looks very much like Imogen.

Powers(if any)(Do they have some downside to their powers? Are the powers too powerful? Do they make the character's life too easy?): N/A

Other Comments(Tell them anything else you want to tell them. Don't forget to have both positive and negative comments. Don't be too hard, but don't be too nice. They are asking for criticism.): You're doing really well, weaving all these characters together, bringing relationships in, and much more just with character descriptions. Well done!